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#41 KChan

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Posted 07 January 2013 - 04:19 AM

I can't remember reading about anyone using wooden armor. Wooden shields and canes, yes, but armor, no. Like Darnam was saying, the amount of wood you would need to protect yourself the way metal armor does would be downright ridiculous. Remember, there's a reason metal became the material of choice for armor on Earth. The same goes for most soldiers on Scadrial, since most of them probably don't have to worry about being used as an anchor for a passing Mistborn too terribly often, and metal armor works really well for protecting against mundane attacks.

Wood? Not so much. Think of all the times a Mistborn in the books smashed someone's dueling cane, or anything made of wood. Remember when Kelsier and Vin flattened a coin between them, or Vin Pushed a massive stained glass window out of a wall. Lurchers' shields work as well as they do because they're huge, heavy slabs that require proper training and conditioning just to carry and use properly. Wood armor would by necessity be thinner - definitely no thicker than the dueling canes we see so many Mistborn snap like toothpicks. Which do you think would come out on top in the battle of wood armor vs Allomancy?

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#42 Ursus

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Posted 07 January 2013 - 07:39 PM

I've always imagined/thought hazekillers use leather armor in combat. It's thick, not too terribly heavy, can be segmented for twisting movements so it's not too stiff. And it can put up a fight against sharper blades/coins/etc. Just a thought.

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#43 Thoughtful Spurts

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Posted 07 January 2013 - 07:54 PM

I'm with Ursus-- I always thought it'd be leather, unless it also had ceramic parts-- which has been used for armour. Ceramic plates (also known as trauma plates) are commonly used as inserts in soft ballistic vests, so there's that. Thick leather with and wooden shields would probably be enough for hazekillers trained since forever in combat to use, but if you want a plate, ceramic is a thing and isn't a metal.

Something like a proto-Dragonskin (http://en.m.wikipedi...kin_(body_armor)) type thing would probably be best for hazekillers. Boron carbide was discovered in the 19th century, so the final empire has probably had it for a good several centuries.

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Noble: Eleanor Hamilton (thug) [WIP], Charlotte Morel (smoker) [WIP], Kenrick Venture [WIP], Donahue Heir [WIP], Madeline (mistborn) [WIP].

#44 Mailliw73

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Posted 07 January 2013 - 09:22 PM

So, it would be better if I changed it to a leather armor? Or is it better to just not wear it al the time?
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#45 Noelle

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Posted 07 January 2013 - 10:42 PM

It's honestly your choice, but if he wears it all the time you just got to accept that people will think he's some sort of allomancer. Which is perfectly fine, I mean not everyone has to be so frikkin secret with their powers. Maybe some people don't care and are just like, meh I prefer living to secrecy =_=
As for if it should be leather or wood, I think leather might be better since it wouldn't be as constricting

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#46 Mailliw73

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Posted 07 January 2013 - 10:49 PM

I think I'll make it a pretty thin leather breastplate for everyday use and a thicker one for battle. Sound good?
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#47 Noelle

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Posted 08 January 2013 - 12:32 AM

Yea, you could also have him use a wooden shield, like a hazekiller, in battle. He has those knives he throws and the shield to hide behind maybe? IDK

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#48 Ursus

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Posted 08 January 2013 - 12:41 AM

But remember like KChan said, those shields aren't some dinky little shield. They're huge slabs that have to withstand massive beatings from mistborn and other powerful allomancers. They won't be versatile or easy to use. Just fyi.

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#49 Thoughtful Spurts

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Posted 08 January 2013 - 02:18 AM

Does no one care about the ceramic thing at all? xD

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#50 Noelle

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Posted 08 January 2013 - 02:28 AM

Well Ceramics are possible, but considering the Lord Ruler's surpression of any sort of scientific advancement they aren't as probable. Is my thinking at least.

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#51 Mailliw73

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Posted 08 January 2013 - 05:22 AM

The ceramics and dragon armor were interesting but as noelle said, it's probably too advanced for this time
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#52 Thoughtful Spurts

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Posted 08 January 2013 - 05:35 AM

Gosh darnit!

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#53 Mailliw73

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Posted 08 January 2013 - 10:51 PM

Ok, before I make those edits concerning the breastplate, I want to ask, if he wears a thinner leather breastplate during the regular day, would it be noticed? If so what should his Allomantic status be, rumored?
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#54 Noelle

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Posted 09 January 2013 - 01:15 AM

I'm not sure if leather armor would be noticed in all honesty, but I'm going to go with yes. As for what allomancer people would think he was, I'd say either a pewter arm (armor for fighting) or a lurcher (armor for pulling object to his chest)

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#55 Mailliw73

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Posted 09 January 2013 - 01:45 AM

So, rumored or known?
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#56 Thoughtful Spurts

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Posted 09 January 2013 - 02:40 AM

I imagine rumored would apply best.

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Posted 09 January 2013 - 02:59 PM

I agree, rumoured sounds good. I'd say, if he is wearing leather armor that is quite thin, less observant characters might not notice it, but observant ones would. Also, on warmer days, or inside, the layering would likely cause Willor to sweat more than the people around him. While he might be used to it enough to avoid seeming uncomfortable, there would still be signs other than bulk.

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#58 Wilor Zerrung


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Posted 09 January 2013 - 10:38 PM

Ok, here you go.

Wilor Zerrung

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Name/Handle: Mailliw73-Handle, call me Mailliw73or Will
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Name: Wilor Zerrung
Type: Noble
Age:22
Gender:Male
Place of Origin:Tremredare
Occupation:Noble, bodyguard/spy
Relationship Status:Single




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Type of Powers: Allomantic Misting; Lurcher
Metals Used: Iron
Degree of Skill: Intermediate
Status: Known to House members only and rumored by some nobles




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Wilor is of average height, about 6 feet. He has light brown hair and green eyes. He is agile and pretty lean, yet he has quite a bit of muscle. He is strong, physically and mentally. He is said to be attractive by many noble ladies. His eyes look everywhere at all times, almost constantly moving to look around and spot any possible dangers. He wears leather gloves with hidden, jointed(I'm not sure if this is the right word?) steel palms for combat. The leather gloves are specially crafted so that he can catch his knives when he Pulls them back to himself. He, when planning on a fight, wears a wooden mask, painted to look metal, over his face with wide eyeholes to be able to still observe everything. He wears a thick leather breastplate and the mask to protect from coins that he Pulls toward himself, when in battle. They are both specially fitted snugly on him. Instead of a Coinshot's pouch of boxings, Wilor keeps a pouch of spiked coins to throw and Pull into enemies. He always keeps two knives sheathed around his waist, the sheath has a catch to prevent the knives from being taken or Pulled on unless a lever is pressed, hidden under the cloak he wears most of the time, when he goes to noble events. Wilor is, if you can't tell, very paranoid about his safety. He is hard to beat because he is so paranoid, which drives him somewhat crazy. He also at nights, wears a cloak that was cut to look like a Mistcloak that he was given by his father, so that Wilor wouldn't be recognized.

On regular days, he wears a nobleman's suit with a relatively thin leather breastplate under his suit, typical of Lurchers in combat. He also always has the knives, ball or battle. He typically wears a cloak as well, especially in public to help hide the knives. His suit is usually not very crisp and perfect, but is wrinkled or untidy, except for when his father forces one of the maids to press and clean the suit for a ball or other important event.




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Wilor is very rebellious at home, but knows he cannot show his rebellious personality to the other nobles and in public. He can't believe how his father and older brother are so ignorant of the Empire and what he perceives as its crimes. He argues with his father all the time. he is not close to anyone in his family, except for his deceased mother. He likes some of the servants, particularly one of his stewards(not a Terrisman). That servant, Sevk, is the only one who knows about Wilor's trips into the slums. He is also a reason, Wilor likes the Skaa more than most nobles. Wilor hates being known as a Zerrung, but stays because he knows his father cares a little about him, enough to not want him to hut, so Wilor stays. He is pretty distrustful and it takes quite a bit for someone to become close to him. He is very observant and most times notices when an emotional Allomancer, particularly Rioters, change his feelings. His day studying or practicing his skills, with weaponry and Allomancy, but as he spends more time in Luthadel, he is becoming more familiar and comfortable with it and is beginning to leave the manor and interact with others. He talks with other nobles and confers with them, but he also will research up on Skaa and their supposed rebellion, and some times create a disguise and sneak into the slums to talk with them. He also takes care of some business for House Zerrung, especially talking to the shop owners. He can't stand people who are constantly gossiping and can't believe that so many nobles are happy and content with the current status of the Empire.
In Wilor's many studies, he has been able to retrieve a couple banned texts, which questioned Skaa's placement in the Empire, so he pities Skaa but is also frustrated with them because they don't seem to want to or care enough to change their lives. Wilor is tired of having to do what society requires and is becoming more bold with his talking about rebellion. He is always ready for a fight. He wants a rebellion because he can't believe all the atrocities of the Empire, he can't believe that Skaa would let themselves be treated how they are and feels bad for how they are treated. He is serious, yet can be funny or clever at times. He is quite solitary, and does most work alone. He is not opposed to company though.




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Special Skills: Knifes, swords, reading/writing, observance, wit, inventing new techniques.


Strengths: Agile, yet strong, Wilor, can pull heavy objects, yet still shoot around like only a Lurcher can. Very observant. Wilor is a great spy, as he always listens and doesn't always talk, this allows him to pick up more of conversations. He is a hard worker and rarely gives up, never easily.


Weaknesses: Talking one on one, his eyes always flit around, watching for signs of anything dangerous, which tends to make people doubt him and believe he is lying. Wilor is comfortable around people, but because they always doubt him, he avoids interpersonal conversations most of the time. At balls, Wilor tends to dine with a large group of people. He will always observe the ball, but usually he will converse A few times and dance a little. In battle, Wilor tends to underestimate people and trust his armor too much, he does have a lot of armor, but he believes he is invincible if he wears it all. That has caused his defeat multiple times.



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Wilor Zerrung was born to Larius and Silvre Zerrung in the year 896 in Tremredare. He was their second son, after Votir. He was always pushed aside by his father but connected better with his mother. His father believed that he was not important because he already had Votir to succeed him. Wilor believed that he was a mistake and that his father never meant to have a second son. When Wilor was eight years old, his mother died from a disease and that crushed him emotionally. He hated his brother and never got along with his father especially after an incident when Wilor was ten years old. On his tenth birthday, as was tradition in his family, he was taken out of the house and beaten to check for Allomantic powers. He was found to be a Lurcher.

His father used that by making Wilor his and Votir's personal bodyguard but not making it obvious that Wilor was a Lurcher by having another pack of bodyguards, but everyone in the Zerrung household knew that Wilor was the real protection. Larius is also a Smoker and so he can block Wilor's pulses when they are in public. Wilor also took to spying and training with his powers when he was a young teenager. He would go and fly around and practice pulling himself places. He became very rebellious and rarely obeyed his father. Larius decided he would go crazy if Wilor was kept inside, so he cut a cloak into strips at the bottom to resemble a Mistcloak, so that he could allow him out at nights. At night, now in Luthadel, where the Skaa slums are more prominent, Wilor has recently taken to visiting Skaa beggars and tossing coins to them. He pities Skaa and wishes they would rebel. When his family moved to Fadrex City in 910 to be closer to Luthadel, he almost ran away back to Tremredare. His father barely kept him in but only by allowing him to practice weaponry and Allomancy with the servants.

Wilor had a knack for throwing knives and swordplay and immediately loved those. He began to pilfer some of his house's specialized weapons and also made some of his own. His favorite was a pair of knives that had spirals of steel around the hilt, and were stone, except for the tip of the blade is iron. that he always kept around his waist, fastened to his belt that he would throw past the training dummies and burn iron, sensing the knife and when it came to the optimum position, Pull it back to himself, which would thrust itself thought the back of the dummy and then begin Pulling on the steel spirals to flip it around and fly into his gauntleted hand.

House Zerrung moved again, this time to Luthadel, in late 917, and is beginning to be recognized and noticed.


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"Father! No, please, don't let them take me! No!" Larius ignored Wilor's cries and turned around, but not before Wilor saw the regret in his eyes. Wilor was roughly dragged into the shed behind his family's manor in Tremredare. The two servants, armed, one with a whip and one with a club, sneered at him, enjoying their job. Their family had beaten every Zerrung child on their tenth birthday for the past few centuries. They were hired to beat them to discover which, if any, children were Allomancers. Wilor was tied up to a post in the center of the shed, facing the back wall. He heard the whip fly a moment before it bit into his back. He tried to cry out , but the second servant had thrust a rag in his mouth to prevent him from doing just that. The pain came again and again. After three, he couldn't focus enough to count, he didn't know how much time passed between the pain starting and it ending. He only knew that the pain ceased coming but still the lashes continued to throb on his back.

"Your turn," he heard the servant with the whip say in his gruff voice to the other servant, his brother. A second later, Wilor felt the club ram into his back, this time, the pain was so intense, Wilor started to slump to the ground, but all of a sudden he felt a strange warmth in his stomach. The pain started to fade as he was distacted by this strange feeling. There was a small lump of it inside him, he internally felt it and it began to decrease and he saw blue lines appear connecting to the latch on the door and the coin pouches on the servants waists. Wilor couldn't explain how, it just happened, he did what felt right and Pulled on the latch which opened the door and immediately the club stopped swinging.

"That's enough," the first servant commanded the one who was clubbing Wilor's back. He was untied and immediately scampered up the steps into the house and ran to his bedroom. He sobbed until he fell asleep that night. Wilor always hated those servants and never felt close to his father again, but he never left the house because of what he saw in his father's eyes when they took him away. Wilor saw sorrow in those hard eyes. He saw regret in the eyes of the man who ordered assassins to kill without any hesitation. He never left because he knew my father didn't want him hurt, but his father didn't love Wilor and Wilor never loved him, but he cared, and even the slightest hint of that was enough for Wilor to stay.


Year 914


Wilor perched on the highest point of Manor Zerrung, surveying Fadrex City, watching for any disturbance in the calm of night. He was also burning iron, therefore searching with both eyes and Allomancy for anything unusual. He sensed movement in a slum a few streets away. Wilor immediately Pulled on a window latch in that direction, bringing him close to the action. He Pulled on another blue line extending from himself to another latch on a building across the alley, effectively leaving him hanging above the middle of the alley. Wilor watched a man stab another larger man's face, dropping him to the ground. The smaller man grabbed the other man's food and ran out of the alley, quicker than should have been possible. A pewterarm, thought Wilor. This should be fun. He stopped Pulling on the two latches and immediately began to fall, but not before he had selected another metal object to pull on heading toward the city center. He stopped at the top of the building that he was Pulling on and scanned the streets below. Wilor sensed metal moving northwest. He Pulled once more to a another building right above the Thug. Wilor jumped off the rooftop and just before hitting the ground Pulling again on the rooftop slightly to slow the fall. He let go of the rooftop and landed in front of the man.

The man abruptly halted in his tracks and began to lunge toward Wilor's face with his knife, but Wilor Pulled the knife towards his chest confusing the man and causing the knife to strike the leather chest plate under his cloak, stopping the blade. He reached down and tossed one of his own knives over the man's head and dodged a punch by the Thug. As the knife fell parallel with the man's stomach, Wilor Pulled on the tip of the blade, pulling it into the Thug's back and through his abdomen into the air between the Thug and himself. He then began to pull on the steel spirals that circled the hilt and released the blade, Pulling the hilt into his gloved hand. The Thug hadn't dropped to the ground like most people Wilor had dueled before. Idiot! Of course he didn't die, he's burning pewter! Wilor mentally cursed himself for underestimating the man. He unsuccessfully tried to dodge the man's lunge for his throat and found himself in the grasp of the man, who was trying to kill his would-be murderer before his pewter ran out and he died. In the lunge he had pinned Wilor's arm with the knife in it tho his side. Wilor wriggled his other hand down to his waist pulling out his second knife. He thrust his arm forward into the man, quickly stabbing repeatedly, the man, almost instantaneously, grew weaker and collapsed to the ground. Wilor shrugged him off and grabbed the basket of food that the man had stolen and shot off back toward the alley, leaving the dead man to become surrounded in his own blood. He dropped to the ground next to the man who had had his face slashed and put the food down and Pulled himself back to Manor Zerrung, considering it a good night's work.

Edited by Mailliw73, 09 January 2013 - 10:41 PM.

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--Wilor Zerrung, der Abzieher


#59 Mailliw73

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Posted 13 January 2013 - 01:35 AM

Should I post the application now?
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#60 Noelle

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Posted 13 January 2013 - 03:21 AM

I honestly feel like you shouldn't make him feel pity for skaa, and here's why:

To noblemen and women, they aren't oppressing skaa. Skaa aren't people who can have feelings or thoughts. They're beasts, subhuman animals. Just look at some of the things Elend asks Vin in Mistborn and you'll have all the proof you need of this. Even Elend, one of the most enlightened characters in the books has to ask whether Skaa can actually think, or love. Even with all the banned texts he's read, he doesn't know that stuff.

Nobles don't think, hey I'm going to go out and oppress another human being today, they think, hey I'm going to go out and deal with some animals. They literally don't know what they're doing when they do these horrible things to skaa. It doesn't make them innocent, per se, but it just means that they don't think they're doing something wrong, or that it could even be wrong.

For a nobleman to think skaa aren't just, you know, beasts, they would need a lot of reasons to figure this out. (For instance my character Adala is half skaa, so she realizes that skaa aren't unthinking beasts because she isn't) and Wilor doesn't have any of those. It's just because he's rebellious, well he could be rebellious about a lot of things, but the very basis of his privileged existence? I don't think he'd be rebellious about that, because I don't see any reason for him to question it. The Lord Ruler educates the nobles to think that the skaa aren't human, and he's done so for hundreds of years. He has a lot of practice at it.



Along with that, I feel like you've made Wilor good at too many things. For instance, if someone is agile, then they should be agile at the cost of strength, rather then having both. I also think, considering Wilor's obsession with fighting, and being protected, and having been raised as a body guard, and not liking people, he shouldn't be a good conversationalist or spy. If he's so good at combat he shouldn't be able to interact easily with people. There needs to be some sort of cost. Plus how can he be a good spy if he makes people uneasy, which is what you said his eyes do to people.

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