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Lorena Elariel

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#1 Lorena Elariel

  • Noble Smoker

  • Age16

  • Relationship StatusSingle

  • OriginLuthadel

  • Allomantic StatusHidden

Posted 14 January 2014 - 04:57 AM

Lorena Elariel
Noble Smoker

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Name/Handle: Noelle
Contact: Aim, Email, PM’s, etc.

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Name: Lorena Elariel
Type: Noble
Age: 16
Gender: Female
Place of Origin: Luthadel
Occupation: Looking Pretty
Relationship Status: Single

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Type of Powers: Misting
Metals Used: Copper
Degree of Skill: Advanced (Savant)
Status: Hidden

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Lorena is beautiful, even by the high standards of nobility. She has an oval face with large startlingly blue eyes and full lips. Her jaw might be a bit more prominent than it needs to be, and her nose slightly stronger than the button it should be, but these things keep her from being inhumanly beautiful.

She is somewhat tall at 5’7” with a full, hourglass figure (at least for a teenager), and while her arms and legs are a little long for her body she will no doubt grow into them in time. Her hair is light blonde, thick, ramrod straight, and it falls to nearly her waist when let down.

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Lorena is prideful, arrogant really, even though she has a rather minor station in the Elariel family she is still a scion of a Great House and she feels that entitles her to much more than it does. In part this was because little was ever denied to her growing up, being her family’s only child and the apple of her parents’ eye, and in part it is merely just how she is. She dreams of grandeur where she should dream of practicality.

Lorena is very proud of her allomancy, and rather annoyed about how much more interested people are in her beauty. She’s not so foolish as to think her beauty a curse, indeed it and her allomancy might be the things that get her a husband above her station, but she hopes that her eventual spouse will find her appealing for more than just her looks.

When wearing her court mask Lorena is the picture of a perfect noblewoman. She is demure, polite, and charming, if a bit of a flirt. However a harsher personality lurks beneath that mask. Something devious and calculating and wanting far more than her station allows, and willing to do much to get it, be it through manipulation or just using her natural charm. Violence to attain her goals however, is out of the question due to the fact that Lorena abhors violence.

Lorena desperately wants to be loved. It doesn't matter to her if the love is a shallow thing, or deep as the sea as long as it is love. She has little self confidence, although you wouldn't know that by the way she acts, and is indeed an extremely insecure young woman due to the fact she thinks her parents love her less because she is female. She doesn't know she is wrong with this assumption, and that it is merely her need to monopolize her parents love that has her seemingly less loved than she was before her brother was born.

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Special Skills: Dancing, Being Charming, Reading, and Writing.

Strengths: Lorena is very good at wrapping people around her little finger. She knows how to use her looks and natural charm to bring people to her side and she is a good actress.

Weaknesses: Lorena cannot stand violence. Violence of any kind makes her freeze and be unable to move, this is because it triggers her memory of being beaten as a child, and she remembers the pain too clearly to think. It means that in any dangerous situation Lorena is almost at a complete loss, and indeed an impediment. She can usually hide this reaction when the ones being hurt are skaa, but if it is a noble she becomes completely immobile. She also has an extremely inflated opinion of herself, her arrogance makes her think little of other people's intelligence and while she is smart this underestimation will probably get her in trouble.

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Lorena was born 902 to Clarisa and Dominic Elariel. She was the product of two years of trying and her parents proceeded to spoil their only daughter rotten. While they were both Elariels of the fourth tier, their status as Allomancers meant they lived more like third tier Elariels, and they could afford to dote on their only child.

Lorena, not unsurprisingly, developed into something of a spoiled brat. She was very proud of her parents Allomancy and her own, because she knew one day she would Snap and become a Mistborn and kill all the enemies of Elariel, and everyone would love her as much as her parents loved her, and the Lord Ruler himself would commend her, and… and… well Lorena had quite the imagination.

Around the same time Lorena turned ten her parents were blessed with another child. A boy named Edric whom Lorena loathed. He was tiny, beautiful, and “perfect” and her parents seemed to love him more than her, even though she’d been around longer. Even though she was going to be a Mistborn. Even though she was so much better than some little boy who couldn’t even feed himself. What did it matter that he was their heir? Lorena was older; she should be the heir not some stupid fat little boy.

She was going to show them, Lorena decided. She would Snap into a Mistborn and she’d be so amazing they’d have to love her more than her stupid little brother. At least, that’s what she had been prepared for. But nothing could have prepared her for the pain of the beating, Lorena had spent her entire life being spoiled, she’d never really faced any sort of serious injury and the beating was serious.

She tried not to scream at first. She was strong, she would Snap quickly and then they’d stop and screaming would just make her seem weak. She was strong, even as the switch laid her back open, she cried but didn’t scream. She was strong, even as the blood started to roll down her back she only whimpered and sobbed. She was strong, even as they kicked her legs out from under her she only groaned in pain. She didn’t scream, she wouldn’t scream. She was strong, she was strong, she was strong. Her tormentors, however, where much stronger, and eventually Lorena did scream. She shouted and howled and shrieked for them to stop, that she was sorry that she’d do anything if they just stopped hurting her. She screamed that she had Snapped once she felt the warmth flare in her chest, but they kept beating her. She didn’t understand, she was supposed to be a Mistborn surely they could sense that? Eventually, mercifully, she lost consciousness.

Lorena drifted in and out of consciousness for nearly a week. Whenever she'd was up enough to start yelling for her parents they would drug her and she'd fall asleep. When she finally awoke her parents were there and Lorena told them that the people who beat her needed to be sacked, no, executed. They hadn’t stopped when she’d Snapped! They’d tried to kill her! Her parents however, told her that she hadn’t Snapped. Lorena knew they were wrong, it didn’t matter that the Seeker hadn’t sensed her, she was a Mistborn, she’d obviously been burning copper. Hadn’t they had some sort of system for sensing people burning copper? They had, and there had been no coppercloud, but Lorena was positive, she’d felt the warmth in her chest. She knew she was Mistborn, her parents were willing to humor her, of course, and Lorena was tested once again.

To her chagrin, however, Lorena wasn’t a Mistborn, merely a Smoker. A Smoker with a coppercloud as sickly as the child who created it, it was half the size it should have been and Lorena was incensed. She had nearly died for this power; she refused to be bad at it. But to her endless annoyance her copper teachers had little to teach her. Copper was a passive power, you burned it and it blocked Seekers from being able to sense Mistings in your coppercloud. Flaring only made the coppercloud slightly bigger, so Lorena, whose coppercloud was so small, flared constantly, hoping that she could make that increase in size permanent.

It worked, after a fashion. Or at least Lorena thought it was her constant flaring of copper that made her coppercloud grow in size. From half the size it should have been it grew, over the space of four years, to nearly twice as big as the average copper cloud at max size. Her teachers were impressed, and they taught Lorena one of the few non-passive parts of Smoking, changing the size of one’s coppercloud. While flaring would increase it slightly, by changing the rate they burned copper a Smoker could make their coppercloud shrink as well. It seemed an odd thing to do, Lorena thought, why would you want to shrink you coppercloud? It was explained that, in a setting like a Ball it would be disadvantageous for her to Smoke with her coppercloud at its full size because she might Smoke for people she didn’t mean too and House Elariel would lose out on finding out about other House’s Mistings; so Lorena learned the skill as she was bid.

Over the same four years Lorena underwent puberty. It turned her from an adorable little girl into a gorgeous young woman, and while she was still not done growing many people began to remark on her beauty, making her have an even higher opinion of herself. Who cared if she was only a Misting, she was a useful one, not something stupid like a Lurcher, (How did they do anything productive anyway, it seemed like they were more apt to injure themselves than anything.). Smokers were actually the most important Misting, in her opinion. Sure they might not be flashy but they were important. Lorena was important.

Right after her sixteenth birthday Lorena was told she would be debuted unto society, it was finally time for her to start information gathering, and perhaps smoke for key members of the Elariel family. She couldn’t be happier about it, after all this was her chance to show everyone how accomplished and amazing she was and how she was much better than her stupid six year old brother who her parents still doted on. They were going to spoil him rotten at the rate they were going, Lorena was sure. But he wasn’t important like Lorena was, she would show everyone at the Perrault Ball.

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Edited by Noelle, 30 May 2014 - 01:15 AM.



#2 Comatose

  • Shard of Brain Inactivity

House Raisaal

Posted 15 January 2014 - 09:05 PM

We've been chatting elsewhere, so all I will say here is that you are APPROVED. Good luck getting a second vote.

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#3 KChan

Atium Chandelier

Posted 16 January 2014 - 05:52 AM

And here it is! You're Approved, pending the addition of an RP sample. Off to Pending you go! :D

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