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#1 Veeras

  • Elliott Faarskar's Steward

Riordan Casuana's Reputation
  • Age35

  • Relationship StatusEunich

  • OriginTathingdwin

Posted 11 April 2018 - 11:00 PM

Type of Character: Keeper

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Name/Handle: LordKronos
Contact: PM Please

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Type: Terrisman
Age: 35
Gender: M
Place of Origin: Tathingdwen
Occupation: Faarskar Steward
Relationship Status: Eunuch

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Type of Powers: Feruchemist
Metals Used: Two Copperminds Bracers - one contains general knowledge and the other is his fine arts metalmind (plays, songs, dances, ect.). As with all Keepers, he has copperminds with all the knowledge of the keepers, he just doesn't wear them at all times. Two tinmind earrings, and two tinmind rings. In them he stores hearing and sight. Recently he has started wearing pewter rings to store strength. Two steel armbands for speed, and two bronze earrings for wakefulness, and two iron earrings for weight. He also cycles through some copper rings to store new information on the spot that he can transfer to his other copperminds.
Degree of Skill: Intermediate
Status: Known/Hidden

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As most Terrisman, Veeras is tall reaching to a height of 6'4". His skin is dark, and were he to grow his hair out, it would be black. However, in the fashion of Terrisman Stewards, his head is constantly shaved. His eyes are dark brown. Veeras is semi-muscular and often has a serious expression on his face. He wears the robes common to a Steward, but on the rare chance that he performs, he chooses to wear all black.

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Veeras is a quiet and kind-hearted individual. He is the epitome of Terris Steward. He hardly speaks unless his employer asks for advice. Even then, Veeras is docile, choosing words carefully as to not upset his employer or his children. As a result, he often has to be ordered to speak his mind, but when he does, his opinion is well respected. Veeras is humble, and even his Master's are unaware of his musical talent. Despite his quiet nature, he loves the family he works for deeply, and specifically loves the children under his care. He is drawn to Master Elliott because of the young man's musical ability. The few times that the serious expression has been off of his face is after listening to Elliott play, even though he tries to hide it. Veeras has a habit of keeping a journal, which are written like letters to his family.

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Special Skills: Raised by the Breeders but trained by the Keepers, he is good at reading, writing, and observing. His love, and specialty are the Fine Arts. Veeras is a skilled musician, and is able to play most instruments, although his preferences are violin, cello, and piano (the only one he owns is a violin). Veeras is also a talented singer and dancer, and due to his castration, has a strong soprano singing voice. He is also a good actor and artist. His acting ability makes him a good liar, but it is not something he often does.

Strengths: The Fine Arts are Veeras' passion. He is particularly a strong musician and even has perfect pitch. He is a phenomenal Steward, often following orders to a T and to perfection (at least as much as he can).

Weaknesses: Veeras docile nature is a weakness in that he often will hold back his opinions to avoid upsetting or offending his superiors. Having never known his parents, he can feel jealous around those who do. This is the primary reason why he's usually silent around the Faarskar children (not that he doesn't care, but he doesn't want to offend them). This also harbors feelings of loneliness.

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Veeras was born in 883 through the Terris breeding programs. He never knew his parents or siblings, if he had any, and it quickly became a source of pain for him as he grew. Early on, the Keepers found out that he had feruchemical powers and kept this secret, training him in how to use his metalminds. One of these, his mentor Davrin, read to him the entire knowledge of the Keepers, so Veeras could memorize.

Davrin was also a singer and when learning songs, Veeras found the relief for his pain. Davrin was the first to witness the young Terrisman smile as he sung, and cultivated a love of music in him. As Veeras went to learn from the Obligators, it was remarked that Veeras had a talent for music and this was encouraged learning for him as he grew. He learned the basics of playing all instruments, but specialized in three: the violin, cello, and piano. He often found himself singing whenever he could manage it. The Obligators even allowed him to perform at times, and it was in these moments, that he found true peace.

Veeras was a quiet child and that moved through his adulthood. He always did what was requested of him and did it efficiently. He was admired by the Obligators for this and at age 20, he was sent off to become the Steward for the Faarskar family. It was with Astor Faarskar and his family that Veeras finally understood what family meant. Astor cared more for the happiness of his family than for riches, and it was something that spoke to Veeras on a deep level. This was something he had missed. He couldn't always, however, keep the jealous feelings at bay. They were there in the back of his mind, and he hated himself for feeling this way. He was robbed of his family as well as robbed of making one of his own. His feelings were justified, but to him, they were an evil thing, especially because he cared deeply for the Faarskars. He especially cared for the children. This only increased his guilt, and as a result, he found himself being more quiet around the children than he normally was. Veeras had no desire to offend his employers by sharing his feelings with them.

As he worked for the Faarskar family, Veeras found himself continuing his musical studies, but he kept it to himself. Veeras was a humble man, and didn't like to tote his talent. He would often go off on his own during his free time to practice his violin. Often he spent his time working "listening" to music in his head. The one thing that has helped with his personal feelings of jealousy has been Elliott's musical talents.

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((Out of Character: The quotes used in this section are from Elliott's biography and are used with the author's knowledge and permission))

Veeras was packing, an action that he hadn't done in many years. For the most part, he had been settled into his life Mantiz. The Terrisman had served Astor Faarskar and his family for the last fifteen years, but now, that was going to change.

Veeras still served the Faarskars, but instead he would be a personal steward for Master Elliott as he moved to Felise to make contacts in Luthadel. Life in Luthadel was different than what Elliott was used to, but Veeras had faith that the young man would do well.

Veera's thoughts went back to the moment a couple of days ago, when all of this had been decided. As always, Veeras waited to be acknowledged before speaking, but his thoughts had moved towards his jealous feelings for the family. Veeras wished he could have known his own. He wished he had met his parents and wondered often if he had any siblings. As he served this family, he wondered what it would be like to dine with his own. His own thoughts were distracting and as Lord Astor asked his question, there was a slight hesitation before he replied.

"My Lord, I will do whatever you ask of me."

The response was simple and neutral, but Lord Astor wanted more. He wanted actual advice, and was ordered to speak his mind. Veeras complied, telling his Master what he really thought. Even a slight smile broke his normally serious face as he spoke.

"I think master Darius is right. If he goes away, anyone will be able to come and kill the rest of you. He has been this House's most important defense for some years, now. That makes Lord Elliott and Lady Freya the best candidates for the travel. However -and I'm sorry if I offend, for it is not my place nor my intention to do it- Freya is still too innocent to go there alone. As you said, Master Astor, the nobility there can be quite dangerous if you're not careful enough. Besides, Elliott is very skilled with a dueling cane. I'm sure he will be able to defend himself."

And that was it. Now Veeras was to accompany Master Elliott to Felise. Despite his happiness in Mantiz, Veeras found himself looking forward to the move. It would be good for him, and so he sat down and began to write.

Dearest Family,

It appears that a change will soon be coming to my life. I will leave the Western Dominance and accompany Master Elliott to the Central Dominance. I think this will help with my personal struggles. I'll be able to focus on serving one Master instead of a whole family. This should keep my negative emotions at bay.

Hopefully I will be able to process these feelings before Master Elliott finds a suitable wife. I am sure that helping my young charge at court will be a primary purpose of mine. Part of that means that the young lord will be spending much time with the ladies at the balls. Maybe I should encourage him to perform at some of them. Master Elliott has impressive skill with his bow.

Veeras paused and looked up, smiling as he tapped a hearing tinmind. In the distance he could hear Elliott playing his violin.

There is still that one note he misses… Veeras thought, turning back to his note.

I'm sure all will turn out fine. Part of my duties is to protect Master Elliott. I'm not a fighter, but I will follow this charge to the best of my ability. I will defend him with my life if necessary.

Again, Veeras looked up, and then pulled out a pewter ring and placed it on his finger. It would be a good idea to store some strength in case he needed it. If at all possible, he would avoid using Feruchemy. It would be a death sentence if he was caught, but for Elliott, he would risk it if he had to.

As always, I will serve to the best of my ability. Master Darius has told me I should be more upfront with my opinions. I promised him I would try. I do not know if I can, but I will hold to my word.

And now, I wish you farewell. I will keep you in my thoughts, as I know I am in yours.



Edited by Comatose, 12 May 2018 - 08:19 PM.

#2 Comatose

  • Shard of Brain Inactivity

Looking Good in Red

Posted 24 April 2018 - 03:25 AM

Very excited for Veeras to join the RP. Thank-you for your patience!

Overall, I think you did a good job of adhering to the restrictive role of a Terris Steward, while still giving the character plenty of personality and unique characteristics. I really like the conflict between his musical talents and his quiet nature.

A few points I'd like clarified/corrected:

- Copperminds - I am not sure what you mean by "contains all knowledge". If you mean the entire Terris collection, that would need to be stored in multiple large bracers, based on Sazed's description in the books. If you mean general knowledge, then I like that he was one with general knowledge and one with his specialty knowledge, and that should be fine.

- You mention under additional traits that he was raised by Keepers. In truth, it is more likely he would be raised in the breeding programs and taught by the Keepers in secret.

Great first character. Good job. Let me know if you have questions about the comments or would like to discuss.

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#3 LordKronos

Riordan Casuana's Reputation

Posted 24 April 2018 - 04:02 AM

Fixed those issues, but to clarify:

He has copperminds with all the knowledge of the keepers, but he generally wears two - one with general knowledge and his fine arts.

He was raised by the breeders and then turned over to the keepers for training.

If you have any other questions, please don’t hesitate to ask. Also I edited on my phone, so if I missed something Let me know.

#4 Comatose

  • Shard of Brain Inactivity

Looking Good in Red

Posted 24 April 2018 - 04:07 AM

Great! He's Approved from my end. One more approval and he's good to go.

Thanks for the quick edits and being so willing to make the changes :).

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#5 KChan

Atium Chandelier

Posted 11 May 2018 - 10:48 PM

It's an approval from me! Welcome to the forum!

You might want to double-check your BBCode, though; your text is really small for some reason.

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