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The Lord Ruler's perfect capital city, Luthadel, is doing the impossible: rebelling. Skaa half-breeds are being taught the power of Allomancy, something that the Lord Ruler's obligators said only existed in the nobility. The enslaved skaa, with their murderous benefactor, now fight back against a living god's oppression.

So, the Inquisition was formed. The nobles begin to fear assassination from all sides. The times of nobility Mistborn killing each other are over. The Steel Inquisitors look for aristocrat traitors and insurgent skaa, and the skaa try with all their strength to merely survive. The Lord Ruler's perfect Final Empire is slowly devolving into chaos.

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#1 Niro

Magnus Venture's Desk

Posted 07 July 2010 - 05:37 PM

Unsnapped Mistborn

Player Information
Handle : Midnight
Contact : [email protected]

Character Information
Name: Niro
Age: 14
Type: Skaa [Halfbreed]
Gender: Male
Marital Status: Single

Type of Powers: Allomancy
Metals Used: Unsnapped, none; Once snapped, all
Degree of Skill: None

Hair: Black, short, naturally curly, very thick.
Eyes: Dark brown [almost black], almond shaped
Height: 5'3?
Weight: 117lbs.
Voice: For his age and height, Niro has a relatively deep voice, still around the tenor mark but well on it's way to baritone, that moves so fluently it is like silk on polished glass.
Overall Appearance: At first glance, and truthfully, Niro is not very imposing. Short and dark skinned, the boy has the slim, hard-packed lean muscles of a young skaa forge worker. He gets his neighbor to cut his hair, as he does not like it curly, as it gets very itchy. He wears light gray nondescript trousers, cut at the knee for freedom of movement, and a dark brown short sleeved tunic, with soft dark brown shoes.

Special Skills: Niro is an avid reader, a strange skill for a skaa. He is also rather efficient at lock-picking and pick-pocketing, gaining these skills in his life in Luthadel.
Strengths: Since spending his time in the forges, Niro has grown a strong, lean muscular build. As his legs have also muscled, Niro can run with great speed, also having quick reflexes and a high agility. He can be witty, sly, and cunning, tricking the na?ve or dumb. Strange for a skaa, Niro has large brain power and thinks logically, analyzing events and people. Growing up on the street, naturally he can hold his own in a street fight against normal humans that may or may not be older or stronger than him. Please note, holding his own the not mean he'll not get injured or lose. It just means it won't be a curb stomp battle and he'll almost bleed out/die in five-ten seconds, so that he can run away. One skill Niro helped develop on his won was free running, being able to run and high speeds and with finesse across crowded streets and along rooftops. His careful eye finds the small details to allow him access to the higher portions of buildings, like small windowsills or outcroppings in the walls.
Weaknesses: Quite frankly, Niro cannot keep his emotions in check. As his brother seemingly abandoned him, he harbors anger and pain that has yet to find an outlet. Therefore, Niro has a short temper, flaring and erupting on people that push to hard on him. Another thing of note is that Niro has little to no experience with weapons of the steel or wooden type. He usually relies on his speed and wits to finish fights.

The streets of Luthadel were hard from Niro sometimes, but other times they gave him life and love. When Elias disappeared, Niro learned to not put his trust many people, as he took his ?betrayal? rather hard. Calm and composed, Niro is easy to like, with his soft humor and quick wits. However, as he looks at meet with a critical eye, he may come off judgmental. Ultimately, Niro works only for himself at this point, not having an outstanding reason to rebel as so many of the skaa already have. Like most skaa, Niro does not hate the nobles, just accepts his life as it is. Full of anger and pain that need a target, Niro is a pot awaiting the chance to boil over when given the chance. If asked what said he was on in the modern conflict, Niro would reply with a joking tone ?Niro is on Niro's side?. He feels no passion, no drive to do any other action than live, eat, piss, and drink. Women are far from his motives at this point, but as he grows and matures that might not be so in the future.

Naga Cett was a noblemen who despised skaa. Unlike most of his brethren, Naga fought the stereotype and never consorted with skaa women in a sexual way. However, his wife, Cora, had different ideas. Cora was a sex crazed women, not content with what her aging husband could provide her. Instead, she dabbled with young skaa men, all with dark skin and curly black hair, essentially making them younger versions of her husband for her.

Cora was a plantation grew when she was younger, growing up isolated in the Remote Dominance, where a lot of darker skinned skaa, and humans in general lived. Her father sent her away, as she was a full-blooded Mistborn, to the other Dominances, marrying her off for a political gain. Constantly, Cora descended upon random skaa men when in Luthadel or when her husband was out of town. It did not matter who they were; as long as they were young and dark, she'd pick them. Before long Cora became pregnant and gave birth to a young dark skinned son, dubbed Niro. It seemed no one knew it wasn't Naga's child, not even Cora.

However, Jocard, a skaa man who Cora often affiliated with and who served as Cora's personal servant, knew better. Naga made love to his wife only a few times a year, whereas dozens of other times she spent with other men, mainly Jocard. Jocard was a tall, strong skaa man. As a personal servant in the Cett family since his childhood, he was treated as if somewhat family. He fed normally and was permitted to marry. With his wife, Jocard had fathered three normal skaa children previous to Niro's birth. Therefore, Jocard knew when he saw a child of his. And Niro was definitely his.

Jocard did the impossible; he snuck into the child's chamber late one night and took him. Before the mist disappeared and the sun arrived, he handed the boy to his oldest son, Elias, age ten. The boy was given large amount of food and money, fleeing Fadrex city, seat of power for the Cett family with baby Niro wrapped in a bundle. The following day, Cora awoke with no child, unleashing her wrath on all by her most trusted servant; Jocard. When an investigation took place and it came up that one of Jocard's son were missing, he and his family were put to death, hung and then decapitated, heads on display atop the walls of the Cett keep.

Elias and Niro made slow progress from Fadrex to Luthadel, though the distance was rather short. They followed the canals when they could, though their time on or near them was short because of the large guard presence. They knew people would be sent to follow them, but they never imagined that when the Steel Inquisition caught wind of them that they'd send forces after them because of Niro's noble birth.

Evading death and attack, Elias and Niro arrived in Luthadel about a year later, Niro having learned to walk and was well on his way to talking in the meantime. Elias raised Niro as Jocard raised Elias; with a strong sense of duty, work, and truth. Elias worked the Casuana forges to feed Niro and himself, teaching Niro words and letters when he could, instilling in him a need for knowledge.

By Niro's eleventh year the Steel Ministry had finally caught up with them. Instead of letting Niro die, Elias drew the Inquisitors far away from Niro, his life being lost in the process. Niro assumed Elias duped him and ran off, so he assumed his brother's job at the forges and lived for himself. Niro is familiar with the skaa rebellion, being invited to it a short time after working in the forges. He declined, however, believing he could not contribute anything noteworthy. He knows nothing of his mother or father, knowing only Elias was his family. For that matter, Niro knows nothing of him being an Unsnapped Mistborn. He'll realize that soon enough, however.

Roleplay Sample

Ash fell from the sky.

Niro welcomed it, stepping out from his small one room hovel. It was a fine day, or as fine as a day could have been when the plants were brown, the landscape was black, and the sun was unbearable. He welcomed the ash because it brought with it a sense of stability, of reassurance that nothing would change. That Niro would live the rest of his days in the monotony of the forges.

He scratched an inch on his head, hearing the soft crunch of his hair as he shifted and displaced it. In one hand he held a small loaf of old bread and a small cube of cheese laid in the other. He glanced up now, looking at the two stories of homes that toppled of his head. Moving the cheese into the hand with the loaf, Niro sprang on his feet, catching the sill of the small hovel with his strong hand brown. The forges made him strong, allowing him the strength to climb to the top of the small building. He sat on the thatched roof now, breaking the loaf in half and ripping the cheese, laying the pieces atop one half of the loaf. Now with a tasty sandwich, Niro bit into it, savoring the sweet taste of the soft goat's cheese, legs gently swinging beneath him.

For all intents and purposes, Niro was happy with his life. As he watched the skaa toll beneath him miserably, all parting to let a noble pass with his congregation, Niro saw the chance to make some quick money to buy some dinner. The loaf was his last, and the cheese he had been saving for awhile. As Niro descended from the building, a swift but trained and confident form, he was intent on his pick-pocketing.

Surprising him, the bell to work rang. Niro watched the skaa throng, either to the mills or to the forges, the rush allowing him to slip a hand into the nobleman's coin purse and pilfering a few coins for dinner. Content with his findings, Niro slipped into the crowd, smiling as he heard the nobleman cry at the reduced weight of his purse. Today was a good day.
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#2 KChan

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Posted 07 July 2010 - 05:48 PM

I know you've been working on this character for quite some time, and it shows. Everything is well thought-out, well-written, and believable. I look forward to seeing Niro in the RP. Accepted!

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