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Tia Lumina Mraziel

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#1 Tia Mraziel

Delwin Ewing

Posted 03 September 2010 - 02:11 AM

"Tia Lumina Mraziel"
Partial-Snapped Mistborn

Player Information
Handle : Amejisuto
Contact : AIM - KoganeTsuki

Character Information
Name: Tia Lumina Mraziel
Age: 20
Type: Lesser Nobility
Gender: Female
Occupation: Herbalist
Marital Status: Single

Type of Powers: Allomancy
Metals Used: Partial-Snapped Mistborn(Will explain in detail later in the App)
Tin - The metal she has burned since she was found by Venial Takiel. This metal is the one she has used often and has even come to a point were she is learning a few things new.

Pewter - The metal she burns without knowledge she is burning it. It's in such small doses - that her parents chalked it up to being a very energetic and well balanced child.

Brass - The metal she burns without knowledge she is burning it. This is in smaller doses then Pewter and is often used to weedle her way into getting what she wants. Used mostly when she was a child, now she uses it when making herbal mixtures that help people. Soothing them - unconscious mind you - and calming them so that they don't fear quite so much for their health.

Degree of Skill:
Tin - Since this is the metal since she has used since her original partial-snap at two years of age, this is the metal that she is most skilled at. She has gotten to a level now that she has actually started to learn to focus on only certain parts of her senses. Drowning out the unimportant things - and focusing on the things she really wants to pay attention too. She has not fully mastered this skill yet - but she is well on the way there
Pewter - Being a metal she unconsciously burns, is only at a beginning level. She has no idea or possible concept that she's actually burning it.
Brass - Same concept as the Pewter. She burns it in such small doses and such small periods she is only one a beginning level still.

When her hair not pinned up or braided in some manner, it falls towards her waist. Her hair is pin straight, with a cut style to it that adds layers. These layers add volume to her hair that wouldn't previously be there. The layers start at their shortest point, right at her shoulders. In a quickly sliding angle straight down towards the middle of her back. This makes for some interesting occurrences if she is near anything that has a static charge to it. It's extra volume also exposes her to the possibility of frizz. Her hair is parted to the left, with a sweep of layered bangs going past her right eye. These bangs start their shortest at her eyebrows, and quickly slope down to the longest part being at her collarbone.

Her hair is a bright red tone. Not a strawberry blond, and not a darker flaming red head. It seems to be caught somewhere in between. A pleasant shade for the eyes to behold. It has a silken texture to it - one that she keeps constantly taken care of. She usually carries a hairbrush with her at all times. One of her nervous habits is brushing her hair when she is agitated - or needs to calm down.

Her eyes are rather almond shaped, but larger in their appearance then one would think. The way her eyes are shaped gives her an edge of permanent innocence. Like a young woman that hasn't completely grown up. She uses this to sucker people into believing her when she is trying to get her way. She doesn't do it in a bad way - but if she's trying to manipulate someone, her eyes are a very big aid in that process.

The almond shaped eyes are accented by a set of deeper red lashes. Rather on the longer side - she has been told many a times by her mother (jokingly mind you) that she was going to take scissors to them so they looked normal. Her eyebrows are well trimmed and gently arched over her eyes - she must keep up appearances. She is nobility - if of a lesser house.

Her eye color is rather striking - for when people actually look at her eyes, and not her form. Her eyes are startling blue, icy in their tone. They hold a quality to them that is almost magnetic - making one wish that they could be pulled in by them. (Now this is not a DEFINITE thing, just the way her eyes look. She will not control people with them, don't worry.) The tone being an icy blue, with a ring of dark ocean blue on the outer edge of the iris. If one pays close attention to her eyes, they can even see hints of a paler green inside her iris'. Most people only see her eyes when she actually lifts up her head, and opens her eyes fully. As most of the time she demurely has her head down, and eyes half-closed.

Height: 5''7'
Weight: 135lbs
Depending on her moods - her voice comes off in varying degrees or tones. Usually her voice is a soft tone - one that you would expect from someone trained to be genteel. There is a laughing quality to it that almost never leaves - but buried beneath that all you can hear a hint of a child hoping for the world to get better. She keeps her tone usually at a peaceful and soft tone. She doesn't like speaking sharply or harshly to others - but will do it if she must. Her voice portrays her moods - if you pay close enough attention.

When she must speak sharply - or with anger - her voice takes on a much huskier tone. One that curls around the mind and makes one stop to think about what they are seriously about to do. Well that's usually what it does - if the person happens to be perceptible to such a tone.

Overall Appearance:
Tia's facial structure definitely speaks of Higher Noble blood - so why is it then that she's a Lesser Nobilities Daughter? Her parents never will tell anyone why - they always use the same excuse they always have. Her facial structure has a delicate air to it. Not breakable - but definitely an air that makes one wonder. Her cheekbones are high and sculpted just enough that they can be seen. Adding lines to her features, and bringing out her appearance just a bit more.

Her ears are well rounded and of a decent size - the shells of her ears being a pale pink tone. Her nose is of a smaller size - but has a bit of a turn to the right side. Giving her a rather pert and adorable look to her delicate features. Her mouth is of a medium size - and turned up at the corners constantly. Giving her the ever present look of smiling. These lips are a softer dusky rose color - one she doesn't need lip-tint for.

Being a red head - natural at that - adds a paler tone to her complexion then others might have. She burns easily if she is in the sun too long. This makes things a little difficult for her - but it just adds to her looks overall. One could easily consider this a flaw in her appearance, as if she stays inside TOO long - she ends up looking pallid and ill. So getting just the right balance of sunlight has proven difficult for her. There is another aspect of her skin tone, that others might think a flaw. But she finds them utterly adorable. Across her nose and cheeks is a splattering of beige freckles. These freckles also appear in light spattering on each arm. They also appear just barely and lightly across the tops of her breasts - if she is happening to be wearing a dress that shows that off.

Her body structure is one that someone would expect from a speed fighter. Oddly enough - she has no idea why her body is like this, but she still exercises regularly to keep herself in shape. Her body structure is long and lean. one that should she actually wear the right kinds of clothing... might attract her some attention.

Her legs are long, making up quite a decent amount of her height. Beneath her skirts are a pair of legs made for running. Long and lean, these legs have a musculature to them that makes them have a subtle look of power to them. One wonders what would happen if she kicked you - if that ever came to happen. Her feet are small and delicate in look - but on the bottom of her feet you'll find thick calluses built from all of her time running around barefoot in gardens and uneven ground. Skaa's feet as one of her maids call them. Tia just doesn't give a damn.

Her legs taper up into hips that are definitely made of child bearing. They flare out from her body causing her to attain an interesting figure. These hips curve gently in towards a waist that is very delicate in it's look. When her corsets are worn properly - she has an hourglass figure. Her torso is built lean - but she does happen to have an ample amount of cleavage. Not overly abundant - but enough for you to know she isn't a boy. Her shoulders are not wide apart - nor close together. Just a decent middle ground.

Her arms are long and have the same muscular structure as her legs. Long and lean - with subtle muscles that make one think that they are more powerful then they portray. Her hands are of a regular size, with long tapering fingers. These fingers are covered in calluses and nick marks - from all of her work in the gardens. This also happens because of the things she handles. She's well known for nicking herself on anything sharp.

Her clothing style tends to vary. She prefers split skirts as they are easier to move around in. Her dresses aren't usually low cut, she prefers to cover as much of herself as possible when she goes out. She prefers sleeves tighter to her upper arm - but flaring out at her hands. These are things that she just generally feels better wearing. She isn't much of one for corsets. But wears them when her mother requests it. Her colors are usually duller tones then something seen at balls. Mostly because she doesn't want to ruin her clothes by working in the garden - or getting ash all over her clothes.

House Mraziel's Specialty is the import and Export of various Medicines and Flora. They tend to use these either in the medicines that several of their members create, or to furnish Greater Nobilities houses. Making them a rather important, but at the same time not very integral, part of the society they live in.

Special Skills:
Gardening - because of the occupation she has taken up, she has become rather skilled at Gardening. All of her herbal mixtures are based off of plants she has raised in her garden - or specifically ordered for the purpose. She even uses her Tin to make doubly sure it's actually what she ordered. She works on General Malady Potions, and things that have more specific uses. She never makes poisons - but knows how to make antidotes if given enough information on the symptoms.

Dancing - She likes dancing, whether ballroom dancing or quicker upbeat tunes. She also does a form of dancing that we would call ballet (I'm not sure if it exists in the Mistborn world.). She has done this since she was a child, and has continued to increase her talents in it. Her body made limber and dexterous due to her constant exercise.

Child Care - She has a rather natural knack for helping children. Especially those who just went through the process of 'Snapping'. She soothes them and does her best to aid those she has access to - She does this as an unconscious effort to make up to herself... what happened to her as a child.

Book Keeping - She does all of her own book keeping for her Herbal work. Meaning she knows her numbers and knows them well. She uses these talents to make sure she isn't getting ripped off by someone. She's very precise in her measurements and payments. She will accept tips if given, but will not turn over the mixtures unless proper payment is given. Now if someone happens to be honestly unable to afford her mixtures - she will more then likely give them the mixture. This is applied mostly to Skaas that are in need of health increasing mixtures.

Herbology - She is amazingly talented with the identification of plants and anything plant related. Flowers, Trees, or Edibles. She uses her Tin, to smell and see better then others would. If she is unsure if it is poisonous, she will use her taste and only use a LITTLE bit of the object being tested. Just enough for flared senses to catch anything a normal human might not. This has saved her life and other peoples lives on several occasions.

This talent with plants - is why she took up her occupation as an Herbalist. Creating mixtures for people - making things like perfume - anything that had to deal with the plants she managed to get at least passing decent at. This is her future - you know?

Well Learned - her parents made sure she had a good education. Enough that she can cite off passages in novels or documents she has taken a particular liking too. This also shows itself when she has to go through intellectual debates.

Eidetic Memory - She has the ability to remember things almost flawlessly. Things she has read or has heard. This is different then Photographic memory, which means she remembers exactly what she has seen. She can recite sections of monologue - or a book she has read. This proves annoying as a child - but has become an asset as an adult.

Reading - This is something she just loves to do. If you aren't capable of finding her in a garden somewhere - she's reading a book. Or walking down the street - likely reading a book. She reads pretty much anywhere. Mostly novels, and books about the Empire - and how it was founded. Things that help her understand her world better. She is also known to read any book that has to do with plants and applications of them.

Sewing - She has about as much talent with this, as a Skaa has at ballroom dancing. She finds that the knots annoy her - and using the needle only ends up with her having a needle stuck through her finger. This was a talent of the Nobility that she never got a good grasp on, and likely never will.

General Cooking - though she can make plant mixtures very well, get her anywhere near a kitchen and it's an explosion waiting to happen. She can boil things - and she can make mixtures, but she cannot even roast some meat over the fire. Somehow things just don't turn out well. Like the one time she managed to set the morning Oat Mash on fire... Just don't ask. Needless to say she's pretty horrible at cooking - but as a Lesser Nobilities daughter she won't see too much of a need for such a talent.

Keeping her mouth shut - As much as she is intelligent and well learned, she has a problem keeping it to herself. If someone brings up a topic she knows something about - her mouth ends up going a mile a minute. Unfortunately the convulted mess her words become - are so advanced in their vocabulary that most people are left dumbfounded. This doesn't make it very easy for her to make enough associates to get invited to the balls. Only those that find her 'blabbering' to be 'fascinating' have deemed it alright for her to attend their balls.

Talking to Boys - If it's a boy and within her own age range, she has trouble speaking to them. If the topic isn't about something she's read in novels, she can't get a single word out. It all comes out as stutters, blushes, and confused expressions. She is completely dumbfounded by this - as are her parents. They wish the best for her, but they find it more and more difficult to find her a husband. What man would be able to deal with her?

Tia to most appears to be a timid and intellectual creature. She really is just that, a majority of the time. Her words are soft spoken, if a bit advanced. She holds herself with as much dignity as one of her station is allowed. Her timid nature is usually an act - one she puts on so that she can survive in the world of Luthadel. A ruthless place for any female who steps out of her place. Which is sad - because she feels she can be so much more.

This timid nature however - becomes very real the moment someone raises a hand against her. Because of what happened before Venial found her, she has had lasting effects on her psyche. A child of two - beat nearly to death - will have many of those it seems. She freaks out and flinches - giving a cry the moment someone raises their hand to her. If they yell she curls away and starts to shake. Fear fills her eyes, and her voice almost completely vanishes.

This will be something that will alter her life for a long time. Unless she can find someone that is actually willing to get her over her fears - and get her to understand that not everyone will hurt her.

She is very big on abandonment issues - she cannot be alone in a room. The moment she is alone in a room - fears starts coating her mind. Making her tongue taste like blood, as she bites her cheeks. She fears being alone, all alone with no one to cradle and comfort her. This comes from being found a two, after nearly dying. She clings to those that call her friend - becoming a faithful follower.

She will allow herself to be used by the other people around her - so long as it means she has a purpose. So long as it means that she's useful. So long as it means she will never be alone again.

There is another unfortunate side effect - from what happened during her partial-snapping. She has some anger problems, as most red heads do. She can only build everything up for so long. When that anger finally snaps - she goes off like the firecracker she is supposed to be. She will yell, and she will scream. She never resorts to physical violence - but the results are nonetheless frightening. Because she can raise her voice rather loud - and make herself be heard.

She has many reasons for the things she does. She took up Herbology as a hobby, and then found she had amazing talent with it. She found this to be something she could throw herself into whole heartedly - and not feel like she may end up a failure. She finds these thoughts to be very detrimental to her well being - but she can't help but have them. That's what happens when you constantly have a feeling that you are just not good enough for those around you.

Flirting goes completely over her head. If a guy tells her that she's pretty, she'll stare at them blankly. Confusion is the usual result you'll get. But if you managed to get her to actually give a verbal response, she'll say that it's mean to play those kinds of jokes on people. That kind of thign is cruel to do - and you just shouldn't do it to people. Unfortunately this makes it difficult for anybody that is actually attracted to her.

She can be a sweet woman, kind and caring towards those that matter to her. Even those that don't. She treats others the way she wants to be treated - and if she finds out she treated someone poorly, she feels more guilty then anyone could ever understand. She does her best to make up for her imagined faults - and is constantly trying to gain approval of some form.

She has a bit of a habit of trying to smooth over situations. When there is a bad situation happening - infighting or that sort of thing - she tries to get herself set up as mediator. So long as the screaming isn't directed at her - she doesn't notice much of anything being wrong. She tries to calm the situation - and the people - by speaking to them. This is also something she does when she is working with a particularly anxious customer.

She can be quirky and very happy - in fact that's what she is most of the time. She puts on the personification of happy. Being cheerful and always smiling, even if she's breaking inside and is actually upset. She does this because someone has to keep everyone happy, and if she is keeping everyone happy... they won't leave her alone. Right?

She acts demure and polite whenever she is in a Noble setting. Most of the time this is a ruse to get people to be comfortable around her. When they are comfortable - she lets her cheerful self out. This is so people are at ease with her - and are more then willing to be around her.

She has nightmares - mostly blurry images and screaming. Yelling and someone saying that she was useless. That she was useless - her brother was useless. All of her siblings were useless. A voice muttering something about stupid children - and their inability to be exactly what he was looking for. The mans voice forever haunts her nightmares.

Because of the emotional and physical trauma that was put upon her two year old body - she put up many mental barriers. Her mind made them naturally to keep her safe. Unfortunately these barriers also stopped other processes from firing in her mind. She never finished her snapping - her mind collapsing in on itself too soon for the rest of the 'Snapping' process to complete. It will have to be completed in the future - for her to become a full Mistborn.

Tia was found as a young child - two years of age. Venial Mraziell was a Nobleman. Not a very high nobleman - but a nobleman nonetheless. He worked hard to keep his family happy, but it was a year or so before they found Tia - that his wife lost their newly born daughter.

It was on a dark night - the mists out - that Venial heard the sobs of a child. He thought it was the mist playing tricks on him - but he ventured out anyways. His wife was still having problems over the loss of their daughter.

What he found in the alley changed his life's course - permanently. You see the child had unknown origins. But from the state of her clothes - she must have had some sort of noble blood. For it was fine fabrics - but torn into tatters and smeared in blood. When he found the girl she was curled up in a ball, just a small little thing. Sobbing because everything around her was hurting her. He assumed that she was a simple Tineyes, he was a Seeker of some talent and could sense the small bits of Tin being burned inside her. He scooped her up and took her home.

When he got her back to his home - his wife Makia was already at the door. Fear painted her features - as the mist was thick that night. But he returned carrying a child. Makia instantly got a bath set up, and they waited for the girls tin reserves to run out. They set her in a warm bath and slowly cleaned her - gently. They found many markings upon her. Several broken bones - and many bruises. It seemed that she was indeed the child of a Noble. But they couldn't figure out who.

They raised her as their daughter - saying she had been the daughter of Makia's sister. Her sister which was known to have died recently. Makia's Niece had gone off with her father, without knowledge of anyone else. So it was easy to say that Tia was that daughter. For Tia had been her Niece's name. The girl was renamed - by her new parents.

It took Makia and Venial two years after finding her - to get her to start talking. To even speak to them. In that time period - Tia burned no tin. She hadn't burned tin since the night she was found. It was at Four that one day she just suddenly snapped out of her sullen and odd mood. Her head snapped up one day - and she entered the kitchens. She asked the cook for a sweety, and the poor woman almost had a heart attack.

It was after that moment that her parents began having her talk to a man known as a 'Soother'. Every week she would see the Soother three times. Each day they would talk and play for two hours. The Soother told her parents there was something special about her - but he couldn't tell what. He just decided to continue to aid her the best he could - her parents paid him well enough anyways.

She was a very energetic child, she loved to sing and dance. She had impeccable balance when it came to dancing, and even when she ran around. People thought many times that she should have more injuries then she did. Be in more pain then she was - but she just never seemed that effected by anything that happened to her.

She'd climb a tree and fall out - she broke her arm when she was seven, and just stared at the bone sticking out. It hurt - oh it hurt - but she really couldn't quite start screaming. It didn't feel that bad. Just enough to make her sniffle.

Of course her parents took this as odd - but Venial couldn't sense anything being burned other then tin - by his daughter. It was at six that she actually started to burn it again - slowly - at the behest of her father. He said that a good little girl - was a sharp little girl. He wanted her to listen in on the meetings, and repeat everything she heard to him. He made sure she had a Smoker with her - anytime he did this. So that her allomantic pulses where hidden to anyone that may be a Seeker.

She grew up - finding that books were a great solace from her nightmares. The nightmares that she woke up from - and constantly dreaded going to sleep because. The nightmares started when she was eight, that was also when she started to realize that speaking demurely and politely gained you more people on your side. It also made people underestimate your capabilities.

Nothing really big happened in her life for awhile. She just continued to grow - continued to learn. She started the process of advancing her Tin burning. She never really liked flaring - it made her head hurt. It was during the course of practicing her Allomancy - that she figured out she liked and had a knack for plants. She started to study documents about plants and learned all she could. At Seventeen she got an apprenticeship with an Herbalist, and found that she had a natural talent for her.

To aid her in her chosen profession - she started to work on Mastering her Allomancy. Having heard from someone in passing - that if you practice hard enough you can focus on just one sense while burning tin. So that's what she began practicing. Eventually - she got to the current day and age she is at. Her parents trying to find her a suitor - and her just trying to be as unassuming as possible at the balls.

Roleplay Sample
Tia stood sat quietly on the small seat that was placed before her workroom window. She has a small space she actually did her work in. Walls lined with wooden drawers, glass jars all over. Several different forms of creation - littered the room. On a table before her, she has a small pot of water boiling. There was a mortar and pestle sitting next to that, full of different herbs. Right now, she was working on a mixture for a Nobleman's daughter. The girl had a hacking cough - so Tia was working on a mixture of herbs that would help lessen the coughing, and help the child get the fluid out of her lungs.

It wasn't an easy task, the child was younger then anyone she had ever made a mixture for. So the portions had to be perfect. Too much and the child would be sick - too little and it wouldn't have the desired effects. Nearby she knew that the Thug she had hired to watch her shop - was waiting for any sort of trouble. There was many a times that someone tried to strong-arm her into giving away her medicine for free. After the first time she had that problem, she had asked her parents to hire a thug to help her watch her shop.

It was not a difficult task, the man was actually a member of her family. A distant cousin - that had come into his powers by his mother having dallied with a Greater Nobleman, at a ball. Though it had destroyed her reputation - the son was not one that would be killed. He wasn't a half-breed, so he was safe.

Tia looked up from her work , her eyes shifted towards the pocket watch sitting on her table. The Nobleman would be here soon, she needed the mixture ready by then. She took some syrup out of a special container. Sitting the bottle down before her. It was a sweet syrup. It was meant to mask the bitter taste of the herbs, making it much easier for a child to take the medication.

The pot released a high pitch whistle, letting her know that the water was heated up to the point it could be used for what she needed it to be used. She poured only a few spoonfuls of the hot water into the mixture. Releasing the inherent properties of the plants within her mortar. She slowly ground it all together into a paste, adding more water to make it closer to a liquid state. Just enough that the herbs would get more of an effect. When she was done with that, she pulled a screened-strainer out of a drawer on her desk.

Slowly she poured the mixtures from her mortar into the small green bottle that was in front of her. She added a little more water, and then poured a generous amount of the syrup in. She then corked the bottle and shook it vigorously to mix the contents to a perfect consistency. With that done she took a candle and lit it. Slowly she poured wax unto the cork of the bottle, creating a seal that she was known for. She finished it off by pressing her makers mark on the wax that covered the top of the cork. The small stamper left a ring around the top - with a single feather in the center of the wax seal.

She stood up, holding the bottle in her hands. Just as the sound of a knock filled the room. "Come in." She said in just a loud enough voice that she could be heard. Politely she turned around and placed the bottle into a pouch that could be tied to the man's waist. As the Nobleman entered she handed him the pouch. "Please listen carefully to what I am going to say, sir. You must make sure to give her one spoonful with her morning meal, and one with her evening. Your daughter should be fine within a week or so. There is enough doses in there to last her till that time. Do not give her anymore, or any less." She stated in a soft and polite tone.

She watched as the man accepted the pouch, and then held out a bag with the payment. Tia smiled at him politely and then tucked her head down. "Have a lovely evening sir. Please do tell anyone else you know, if they happen to need aid of this nature." She said in a quiet tone. She had practiced this voice so hard, it was just loud enough that people could hear. It also made most people believe that she had quite a sense of modesty about her. Polite, and demure. She was exactly what a noble lady should be.

As the Nobleman left she released a sigh of relief. She turned her attention back to her desk, sitting back down. She quickly cleaned out her mortar, and went back to work. She had more mixtures to make, more people to help. She never really had much else to do, getting invited to Balls was a rare thing. She was only a Mraziel.

Note: Tia is meant to be a character that admins can seriously mess with with. I know she's messed up - I made her that way on purpose. I pretty much wanted a character that can start out the game messed up - and slowly mend as it goes on. The partial-snapping was mostly my own idea, and Eythen helped me flesh it out a little. There was also aid given by my friend who is training to be Child Psychologist. The gist of it is this - Tia is a character that admins can pretty much use for plots. I don't care if you get her hurt - just don't kill her. I'm leaving it open ended to you on who her Noble Parents are, and if that even gets discovered. You are welcome to decide the time and place that the rest of her Snapping happens, so that she can become a Full Mistborn. I am willing to do what I can to work with you on this.

#2 Chaos

High House Noble

Posted 05 September 2010 - 10:12 PM

It's good. I like her. I would say as to the partial-snapping thing... it's not possible. The only way for that to happen in the context of this character would be for there to only be blocks on the other metals that are psychological in nature. She would have to begin resolving her psychological issues before her mind would let her gain access to them.

Thus, in reality, she has Snapped a long time ago. It's her psychological issues which give the impression of being "partially Snapped". Does that make sense, and seem consistent to your vision of the character?

#3 Tia Mraziel

Delwin Ewing

Posted 05 September 2010 - 11:42 PM

That's exactly what I was thinking. What I meant by the statement I made, about you deciding when her snap finishes - is as simple as this. I want to thread, and have her develop and start to notice she's using other metals. Like someone gets an idea of what she is, by the minute ways she manipulates people or something. So they test to see if she's actually a full mistborn? Instead of a misting? Through that she will realize, and perhaps get someone to help her realize she is psychologically messed up - and because of it she can't reach her full potential?

#4 Chaos

High House Noble

Posted 09 September 2010 - 05:30 AM

Cami has an issue with Tia. She'll post about it soon. I just wanted to let you know we are still very aware of your character :) We're busy with classwork a lot, so bear with us.

#5 Tia Mraziel

Delwin Ewing

Posted 09 September 2010 - 05:48 AM

Patience is an art I learned well. I understand and I can wait. Just understand that I won't deal with any issues probably for the next few days. I don't wnat to take any anger out on those that do not deserve it. I'm going through some problems in real life.

#6 KChan

Atium Chandelier

Posted 10 September 2010 - 03:58 AM

It's not a make-or-break issue, mind, so sorry if it sounded like I was going to completely and utterly destroy your character. I'm not, don't worry. ;)

I just wanted to point out that while I don't want to shove aside what your friend told you, oftentimes what we teachers observe happens with children - including those who have been in traumatic situations - will disagree with what child psychologists tell us what "should" or "would" happen. At such a young age, Tia would be unlikely to even remember what happened to her, and any long-lasting issues she had as a result would be far less severe than is written here.

In my experience, once a child has been removed from the negative environment, or once their ordeal is over (and many of my kids were as young as two or three at the time), within a year or two, sometimes less, they have almost completely forgotten what happened to them. In many cases, by the time they were ready to leave our preschool for kindergarten, I would have been unable to tell that anything had happened to them at all, had I not known about it beforehand. I worked in child care for years before taking a break to further my education, and specialized in working with two-year-olds for the majority of that time. So I just wanted to share with you my perspective on what I've seen in my experience working with kids quite similar (in some ways, at least :P) to your character.

If you're worried about this affecting your character's story, there's still plenty there for interesting plotlines, like perhaps finding out who her true parents are. That was the first thing that came to my mind, anyways, but that's the great thing about this board: it's pretty easy to find a story if you open your character up to the world around them.

Anyways, that's all I have to say. I would encourage you to keep it in mind as you write Tia, to make her a more believable character. You're officially accepted as of now, but if you wish to edit her profile to reflect what I told you, feel free to do so.

Welcome to the RP!

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