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The Lord Ruler's perfect capital city, Luthadel, is doing the impossible: rebelling. Skaa half-breeds are being taught the power of Allomancy, something that the Lord Ruler's obligators said only existed in the nobility. The enslaved skaa, with their murderous benefactor, now fight back against a living god's oppression.

So, the Inquisition was formed. The nobles begin to fear assassination from all sides. The times of nobility Mistborn killing each other are over. The Steel Inquisitors look for aristocrat traitors and insurgent skaa, and the skaa try with all their strength to merely survive. The Lord Ruler's perfect Final Empire is slowly devolving into chaos.

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#1 Haradion Drogon


Posted 13 June 2012 - 08:23 PM


Player Information
Name/Handle: Haradion Drogon
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Character Information
Name: EruSaar
Age: 7th Generation
Gender: Male (In True Form)
Place of Origin: Kandra Homeland
Occupation: Contracted Kandra
Relationship Status: Single

-Type: Blessing
- Blessing: Blessing of Potency (so Probably Iron)

-Degree of Skill: Intermediate

The appearance of a Kandra varies considerably, but on the occasion that the current hold of the Contract allows him to manipulate his own body however he wishes, he chooses to appear as a Noble Youth, with pale skin, Black hair, and green eyes. The Blessing he uses sometimes lets him pass himself off as a thug, but not when a seeker could detect him.

Special Skills: A Gifted actor, Adaptability, Shape-shifting. He can modify his own appearance to disguise himself, if he is needed to, but will often just use a new set of bones.

The Blessing of Potency grants him almost double the speed and strength of a normal Kandra, or impersonated Human, and can defend himself fine in a Fight. He is also almost indestructible, able to reform himself in a matter of Hours from serious wounds that would be fatal for a Human.

He holds to the Contract above and beyond even normal Kandra, and will rather die than intentionally kill a human. This makes combat difficult, although if he can avoid killing then he can fight.
He will however obey order to attack, capture or wound others.
A duralumin fueled Soothing or Rioting could take control of the him – but since Duralumin is unknown at the moment, that is fine.

EruSaar is devoted to the Contract, and as such has a keen sense of responsibility. However, he is also cynical in his observations of Humans, a trait that has given him a beating more than once. He views current Allomancy as cheap party tricks compared to the original allomancers who Kandra were almost wiped out by - and therefore has no fear of the current coinshots or thugs. He is careful not to let this show in people he is impersonating. He is devoted to gathering back the Atium that the Lord Ruler has sold to the Nobles, and as such is willing to do anything within the Contract to gain that. Even among Kandra he is considered rash, often leaping to the first solution, rather than the best solution. When not actively impersonating someone (Conversing with his contract Holder for instance) he will sometimes relapse into his own personality. He also has a talent for sarcasm, cynicism and deliberate understatement that will sometimes annoy masters. He is comfortable in the knowledge that they can do little to permanently harm him however, which means he can get away with the occasional wisecrack. he is the closest thing to a Kandra with a sense of Humor.

He does not resent Humans, but views most as undignified, selfish, destructive creatures of Ruin. (Note: Ruin and Preservation are part of the Kandra Religion) - in thier very nature.

EruSaar was brought into sentience from a Mistwraith almost three centuries ago, so is quite young for a Kandra, especially for a contract server. His Blessing distinguished himself among the Kandra, although he was hardly unique. He was born after the first Contract had been created, well into the Lord Ruler's - or Father as he is known to the Kandra - reign.

He was raised therefore, in awe of the allomancers, who brought the Kandra to destruction so many years before. It is only in the Last century or so that EruSaar began working under the Contract, since he was born in the sixth century, and spent the next learning about the Kandra, and then raising other Kandra. When he left the Kandra Homeland, he was disappointed to discover that the allomancers he was in awe of were in fact little more than political schemers, held only in check by the Lord Ruler’s Steel Ministry. The Soothers and Rioters were weak compared to those of old, the secrets of many of the Metals lost, seemingly forever. When he was paid in atium, he was wasted on inter-house scheming and spying, rather than doing anything worthwhile, but at least he was able to do the things he was good at.

He has had a couple of Contracts since leaving with his original contract. Two of them ended successfully, and the third ended with the death of the Contract holder, after which he departed for the Homeland.

He has recently left the Homeland once again, haveing gained a new Contract.

Roleplay Sample
EruSaar stood, his form pulsing, digesting. The spinal cord clicked into place and vertebrae slid into position, popping one after the other. The skull shifted up the translucent skin into position, and skin was pulled over it. Limbs grew, flesh and muscle forming around bones, and skin growing around the red mass. Organs formed. The heart began to pulse, and the chest heaved and sagged as lunged filled with air for the first time. Hair that was digested before was forced from his stomach when he had digested it through his transucent skin, through pours and sprouted out of his head - The only thing he could not replicate... The eyes came into being last, rolling to the front of his head and focused on his master. When the process was complete, a fully form human male stood before his master.

“It is finished Master.” EruSaar said. The voice was a perfect imitation – it always was. The form was new, some Noble youth, killed by one of his Masters coinshots when the boy was out in the mists for some reason.

“I can see…” said Lord Erikel. "You are prepared for you mission?"
EruSaar nodded, fidgeting, already practicing the mannerisms of his new body.

“And what must you do?”

EruSaar narrowed his eyes, and looked his Master in the face.
“I will impersonate the young Lord Galad, in the negotiations, sabotaging the talks in order to pressure House Jedue into seeking its weapons else ware – straight into the your hands, gaining house Erikel a hearty profit, and installing a permanent spy in the House.”
Lord Erikel Smiled. “I trust I do not need to remind you the consequences of failure EruSaar?”

EruSaar only grimaced in response. “We have a Contract Master – I shall not fail you.”

Edited by Haradion Drogon, 08 October 2012 - 07:02 AM.


EruSaar - Kandra

#2 Comatose

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Looking Good in Red

Posted 13 June 2012 - 09:53 PM

Good work. I think you have a totally believable kandra character here. I like how you've kept things simple, while still giving EruSaar some individuality.

Two issues:

1. We may need to check EruSaar's actual age. The kandra generation system can be a little complex. While I think you may have got it right, I need to double check the numbers. So not really an issue, just a concern.

2. In your RP sample you show EruSaar sprouting hair. This is impossible, as kandra cannot create hair on their own. Any hair they have must be saved when they digest a body and placed when the body is formed. The more hair to place, the more difficult it is. Thus, when kandra reuse bodies a long time after they were originally digested, or use bones they did not digest themselves, they are often bald (unless they attain hair from some other source and save it). You mention in the appearance section that he prefers black hair. This is fine, but it also mean that he would have to digest someone with black hair and save the hair, or use dye.

Other than that, I don't have much else to say. I personally think this is your best character yet, and I see some real improvement from your first few characters.

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#3 Haradion Drogon


Posted 14 June 2012 - 07:43 AM

Thanks - Sometimes I think my writting ability is like a four-year-old who watchs his dad play the gutair. He watchs for a couple of years, recognises good music, then picks up the gutiar to try himself... The result is never good the first couple of times...but eventualy he gets better .

Its like that for writting with me - cause I read a heck of a lot :)

I have made the requested modification to the character - Because the generation system is so complex, to you mind if I leave that concern as it is? If it needs changeing, let me know and I will be happy to do so.

Edited by Haradion Drogon, 19 June 2012 - 09:27 PM.


EruSaar - Kandra

#4 Haradion Drogon


Posted 06 October 2012 - 08:39 PM

I created this application almost three months ago. I have yet to see a final verdict on wether or not it is acceptable.

Is this Kandra character good enough or isn't it?

I have been fin to patiently wait for a response - I have a lot of things to do that take up my time, but three months? I won't pretend I have been checking back every single day, but I would have hoped for some kind of response by now...Its disapointing to see otherwise.


EruSaar - Kandra

#5 Comatose

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Looking Good in Red

Posted 08 October 2012 - 12:44 AM

Hey Haradion!

I'm really sorry we haven't given you an update on EruSaar for so long. You are right, three months is kind of ridiculous time to wait, and I'm sorry you've gone this long without a reply. In the future, feel free to PM a staff member with your concerns.

If you want a reason, here it is. This summer was VERY busy for all of us. I was at a summer camp away from internet most of the summer, so I was unable to communicate with my fellow admins, and I know Chaos and KChan were both busy with graduations, moving states, and many other things. This isn't necessarily an excuse, but you should just know that we weren't JUST ignoring you over the summer, we were having trouble keeping up with each other as well. Now that we are all back into routines, we've started picking up pieces again, however some things seem to have gotten missed.

Last I checked, you had addressed my concerns with EruSaar, but I'll give him another read through, chat with the other admins quickly, and try to get him accepted ASAP. Thank-you for your patience and understanding, and I hope you accept my apologies for neglecting you in this way.

EDIT: Okay, Haradion, a few QUICK things. We are still waiting on a reply from Brandon for the generation system thing, but right now, I think what you have is fine. Just try to avoid references to how many years old EruSaar is in the RP so that we have less contradictions to edit later.
I only have one concern, and that is EruSaar should have a contract BEFORE leaving the homeland, as kandra without contracts are not allowed to wander about (Except under VERY special circumstances). Just change that little bit to something about him accepting a new contract before leaving, and you should be fine.
If you are wondering who to hire out EruSaar to in the RP, Felicity still has several unnamed kandra, and EruSaar could easily be one of them. If you want to find a master for him, feel free to post a topic in the plotting section and see who bites. If you want to work with Felicity, PM me and we can set something up. Since she has her eyes on a lot of people, we can tailor EruSaar's assignment so you can work with the characters you are the most interested in (ie: a certain noble house or faction of the rebellion, etc.).

Other than that, he's good to go. Sorry again for taking so long. Next time, please don't be afraid to speak up sooner. We admins have to be held accountable for our oversights. If we aren't there is no way for us to learn from our mistakes or improve.

I hope you are doing well, and am excited to get you RPing :).

EDIT: Congratulations, he's accepted! Just keep in mind those changes that might need to be made later one, once we hear back from Brandon.

Good luck in the RP :)

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