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The Lord Ruler's perfect capital city, Luthadel, is doing the impossible: rebelling. Skaa half-breeds are being taught the power of Allomancy, something that the Lord Ruler's obligators said only existed in the nobility. The enslaved skaa, with their murderous benefactor, now fight back against a living god's oppression.

So, the Inquisition was formed. The nobles begin to fear assassination from all sides. The times of nobility Mistborn killing each other are over. The Steel Inquisitors look for aristocrat traitors and insurgent skaa, and the skaa try with all their strength to merely survive. The Lord Ruler's perfect Final Empire is slowly devolving into chaos.

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In Topic: Lara - Skaa Smoker

06 September 2018 - 02:03 AM

I absolutely love how you have taken Matt's advice and changed how the scene with her mothers and the inquisitors goes. When I read the first version of the history, I had the same sort of reaction that Matt did.

I think you have taken his advice really well and really displayed a better backstory for Lara. I think what I have a hard time with understanding is exactly where in her history she Snaps.

If the intention is to have her Snap during the Inquisitor scene, I don't think that even as emotionally traumatizing as seeing your mother and sister beaten and poisoned to death is enough to actually Snap her, especially at 16. I think that it's more feasible that she maybe got beaten up as a kid, or beaten intentionally because her mother knows her father is a nobleman. It seems like the kind of thing a wise-to-the-world skaa woman would do to her children because she knows how useful Mistings are.


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Despite her constant pestering for stories and information, she only learned the basics of how Allomancy worked.

I think this might be a good place to expand on the actual Snapping. Again, her mother knowing that her father is a nobleman, there's no way that she wouldn't want her children to know what Allomancy is and how its used, especially if their shop is used as a hideout for skaa/rebellion crews.

On another note, I do really like what Daydam says about characterization of the skaa she goes to. Maybe some of them don't trust her, maybe they don't like Lane much, so they have an instinctive distaste for her, too. Some skaa are just biased against noblemen because they have never had the same struggles, so maybe they don't like her because she was referred by him. You don't have to like someone to work with them.

So these are just things to think about.

The only thing that is really important and integral to her character is to pinpoint the exact moment she Snaps in my opinion.

In Topic: Marina Tekiel

09 June 2018 - 09:26 PM

I love the development of this character. She has really interesting conflicts, and I absolutely share some of her personality traits... <~<

Accepted

In Topic: Swashbucklers

03 June 2018 - 01:55 AM

"Most of the Luthadel gowns are almost as bad. Even the sleeveless ballgowns are so tight I can't twist or bend properly." Eliza said

Felix raised one of his eyebrows and cocked his head to the side. "Why would you wear a Luthadel gown?" he asked. He laughed.

"I'm never giving up my Islands' coat... Although I guess following the fashions is more important for you than for me... I think for ease of movement, it would be better to keep wearing the Islands' fashion. It'll also be easier to conceal a blade underneath, and you can at least move your torso easier."

With that said, Felix went back into training. Not giving Eliza time to completely catch her breath. After all, if she was attacked, they would not wait either... He tried to demonstrate the movements that he and Eliza should be utilizing in their knife fighting. He used smaller, quicker movements, rather than big, sweeping strikes. Uncle Nat was easily twice the size in musculature than Felix was, which meant that he was a giant compared to Eliza. He had the raw power to back up his knife jabs, he rarely needed to quickly duck out of the way.

"Do you see the difference here?" Felix asked.

In Topic: Axelle D'Orsay

05 May 2018 - 02:57 AM

I really like Axelle's character conflicts and how she's going to stand out in Luthadel, and how little she cares. It's great.

I have no other notes, so she's Accepted!

one more to go :)

In Topic: Surviving Duplicity.

07 March 2018 - 02:48 AM

Garrett didn't know what Augustin meant that his sister would be too old to introduce to active duty... but he was almost grateful for it. He didn't want to intentionally put her into that situation. He would rather not see her death.

"As long as my sister can learn self defense, and have ample opportunity to pursue physical training - if she wishes - I will be happy," Garrett said.

He also liked the idea of a lighter workload. Having just the duties of a Mistborn, or just the duties of a Lord was one thing, but having both at once, without much help... He was tired of it, to say the least.

Augustin didn't change completely with the revelation that Garrett was a Mistborn, but it was obvious that he was happier knowing that he was getting a Mistborn. That's something that Garrett would have to remember for the future. He thought it would be a good bargaining chip, but he wasn't sure how powerful it really was. Especially with his negligence of training as of late. Garrett hadn't even thought of the potential for more Mistborn in his bloodline.

He left out the piece of information that his first marriage didn't produce an heir. Well, he didn't leave it out, but instead didn't intend on making it a point to dwell on.

"Active duty... Yes. I have been the only Atwood Mistborn in two decades. Keeping our High House status did take some effort... both openly in the political sphere and shrowded in the mists."