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The Lord Ruler's perfect capital city, Luthadel, is doing the impossible: rebelling. Skaa half-breeds are being taught the power of Allomancy, something that the Lord Ruler's obligators said only existed in the nobility. The enslaved skaa, with their murderous benefactor, now fight back against a living god's oppression.

So, the Inquisition was formed. The nobles begin to fear assassination from all sides. The times of nobility Mistborn killing each other are over. The Steel Inquisitors look for aristocrat traitors and insurgent skaa, and the skaa try with all their strength to merely survive. The Lord Ruler's perfect Final Empire is slowly devolving into chaos.

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In Topic: Lucien Faarskar

05 December 2018 - 04:33 PM

Lucien is going to be really fun to interact with. I really enjoy that you have portrayed some of the ideas that were in the books about most noblemen not even thinking about skaa as people in the app. It's really really good.

I definitely approve. You'll just need Comatose's approval on your changes and you'll be all set!

In Topic: Lara

05 December 2018 - 04:11 PM

I can see how much work you've put into Lara. I'm so excited to see how she's changed and how you've developed her. You have definitely taken the feedback we've given you and really incorporated it into her app.

I whole-heartedly approve

In Topic: Lailen Raisaal

05 December 2018 - 04:07 PM

I really enjoyed reading Lailen. I love that she is in a contest with life. That part of her personality really came through in the history and the role play sample. Where she's just trying to win. At life. I love it. Being a competitive person, myself, I can practically feel that mindset as you've described it.

It is an approval from me.

You need one more.

In Topic: Lara - Skaa Smoker

06 September 2018 - 02:03 AM

I absolutely love how you have taken Matt's advice and changed how the scene with her mothers and the inquisitors goes. When I read the first version of the history, I had the same sort of reaction that Matt did.

I think you have taken his advice really well and really displayed a better backstory for Lara. I think what I have a hard time with understanding is exactly where in her history she Snaps.

If the intention is to have her Snap during the Inquisitor scene, I don't think that even as emotionally traumatizing as seeing your mother and sister beaten and poisoned to death is enough to actually Snap her, especially at 16. I think that it's more feasible that she maybe got beaten up as a kid, or beaten intentionally because her mother knows her father is a nobleman. It seems like the kind of thing a wise-to-the-world skaa woman would do to her children because she knows how useful Mistings are.


Despite her constant pestering for stories and information, she only learned the basics of how Allomancy worked.

I think this might be a good place to expand on the actual Snapping. Again, her mother knowing that her father is a nobleman, there's no way that she wouldn't want her children to know what Allomancy is and how its used, especially if their shop is used as a hideout for skaa/rebellion crews.

On another note, I do really like what Daydam says about characterization of the skaa she goes to. Maybe some of them don't trust her, maybe they don't like Lane much, so they have an instinctive distaste for her, too. Some skaa are just biased against noblemen because they have never had the same struggles, so maybe they don't like her because she was referred by him. You don't have to like someone to work with them.

So these are just things to think about.

The only thing that is really important and integral to her character is to pinpoint the exact moment she Snaps in my opinion.